I could never have imagined…

by Jill on February 11, 2011 · 21 comments

in writing


I could never have imagined a more emotional day.

Really it started out like most days. I was in a hurry to get to work, and traffic was horrendous. The smell of exhaust always made me feel sick to my stomach. Or maybe it was my nerves that morning.

That was the biggest day of my career. It was all on my shoulders to seal the deal with IBM.

We needed that deal. The bad economy had been brutal on us, and without that account we would have had to do some serious down-sizing.

We weren’t a large company by any means. And I had become good friends with so many of the women I worked with.

I didn’t want to see any of them, or myself, go.

A few of us grabbed a quick lunch, but I was too nervous to eat much. Once back at the office I looked over my notes one last time then started the proposal.

Things seemed to go well. IBM was very receptive to my ideas. And at the end of the meeting they accepted my offer!

That was huge! It was great for the company. And of course for me too.

After work several of us went out to celebrate. I loved having those women in my life. They were pretty much the only people in my life.

To be surrounded by such amazing friends at that point was too overwhelming to hold it in. As things sometimes went after a few drinks, I teared up & got emotional.

We continued to talk & laugh & have a good time.

Eventually most of my friends needed to get home, and it was just me and Janet.

Janet was older than me, 17 years older to be exact. But she was my best friend.

When my parents were killed 3 years earlier, Janet was the one friend I could call any time of day. We knew everything about each other.

As the two of us sat in the booth Janet got quiet. I asked her what was bothering her.

She was obviously nervous.

I reassured her that no matter what was on her mind, I would be there for her. Besides, I was still on such a high from making the IBM deal I could handle anything.

Janet took a deep breath. “I am your birth mother.”

Then the whole world shifted.

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This week’s prompt is to write a piece that begins with the line, “I could never have imagined” and ends with the line, “Then the whole world shifted.”

My immediate thought was to write about my BFF Lori who passed away 1 1/2 years ago.

But I wanted this to a happy “world shift.”

I also wanted to write fiction. It’s a bigger challenge for me.

I wanted to do something different than most people. I figured they would write about having a baby, 9/11, or getting bad medical news.

{ 19 comments… read them below or add one }

Bella Michelle
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February 11, 2011 at 9:50 am

Wow…you most assuredly did something different! Happy Weekend, blog friend!
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Valerie February 11, 2011 at 10:18 am

This one packs a powerful punch! I didn’t see that ending coming at all! It was a big day for Janet as well!

Great writing-and now I want to know, what happens next?
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Jill
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February 11, 2011 at 11:15 am

Thank you so much! Maybe I can continue the story with next weeks prompt somehow.

d, the undomestic housewife
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February 11, 2011 at 12:13 pm

Wow, did not see that coming!!
Loved it.. good use of words, and of building up to something.. :)
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Mad Woman behind the Blog
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February 11, 2011 at 2:13 pm

I so love a surprise ending and you did this one very well. What a great moment. And yeah, I can’t wait to read more.

Leighann February 11, 2011 at 4:06 pm

Wow didn’t see that coming!!

Kris February 11, 2011 at 5:44 pm

Wow that was really good. I mean really.good
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Cheryl @ Mommypants February 11, 2011 at 8:38 pm

Good for you, Jill! I love that you’re trying fiction!

You know, I didn’t even think of 9/11. I don’t know if anyone wrote about that, actually, but I haven’t gotten through all 89 entries yet!

You’ve set up quiet an interesting scenario. I wonder why Janet decided to drop that bombshell then??

Mandyland February 11, 2011 at 9:44 pm

Wow…that wasn’t the ending I was suspecting! Total. Sucker punch.

Great job delving into the world of fiction. And thank you so much for keeping it happy! lol
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Mommylebron
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February 11, 2011 at 11:07 pm

I hope you continue this story! I didn’t see that coming in the end and would to hear more of the details! Good for for trying out fiction, it’s fun because you have so much more freedom.
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The Drama Mama
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February 11, 2011 at 11:59 pm

WOW!!! I totally didnt see that coming AT ALL. Fantastic spin there at the end. I would really like to know more about her reaction!
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Melissa (Confessions of a Dr.Mom) February 12, 2011 at 9:32 am

Wow, I was completely hooked and thought this was a true story until I read the paragraph below it.

This was excellent. Great job!
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Lydia February 13, 2011 at 1:59 am

The twist definately surprised me. I was waiting for something more conneced to her work. And I love this idea that she’s friends with this woman, that she got her through the loss of her parents, and the whole time she was the birth mother. It’s really good.
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Yuliya February 13, 2011 at 1:40 pm

I thought it was non-fiction too, good for you for trying fiction. This is such a good group to learn with, isn’t it?

Jill
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February 13, 2011 at 7:10 pm

I 1000% agree about this group of women. Thanks for stopping by here.

Katie February 13, 2011 at 7:21 pm

WOW! I’m so inspired! I’ve never been brave enough to try fiction, and you just aced it :-) You definitely need to continue the story….
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Kelly
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February 13, 2011 at 10:06 pm

You were right. We were definitely on the same wave length with our posts. I have always been intrigued with the long lost birth mother/adoptee stories. I loved reading yours and now I want to know her reaction to Janet’s confession. Perhaps in another post?
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Midwest "Mom"ments
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February 14, 2011 at 10:22 am

I totally did NOT see that ending coming! Great job for attempting fiction!
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Maxine Byrd December 14, 2011 at 1:07 am

Loved it.. And I love this idea that she’s friends with this woman, that she got her through the loss of her parents, and the whole time she was the birth mother.
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